I really hope you will all like this. It's in first person which is definitely the point of view that I'm LEAST comfortable with. Even second person is better. I just find it hard to give my characters a good voice with first person, which is...really weird. So I hope Katherine has a good voice, and that all the other characters seem good too. Especially Lestrade. (This story uses the BBC Sherlock show as canon, by the way).
Okay, I'll be quiet up here now, but read at the bottom, because I have notes about things there!
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Tick.
Tock.
Tick.
Tock.
I drummed my fingers idly on my desk,
not loudly enough to draw attention from the teacher, but enough to
get annoyed looks from my classmates. I didn't really care. It was
a study hall, for God's sake. They would just have to deal.
With my other hand, I doodled random
things on the back of some print-outs. A dog. Shoes with wings.
Hogwarts. A bird attacking the Hulk. You know, sensible things like
that.
I yawned and looked at the clock.
Study hall was boring when none of your friends were in it.
Apparently, I was tapping louder than I
thought, because the teacher shot me a look. “Katherine,” she
said sharply. I snatched my hand back from the table and slid low in
my seat, trying to avoid further attention. “Come here, please.”
No such luck. I cursed under my breath and walked over to her desk.
Other students looked over, some concerned, some looking for
entertainment.
Mrs. Castro looked me up and down with
an almost disgusted look on her pinched face. “What were you
doing?”
“I was tapping my fingers?” Though
it should have been a statement, it came out like a question.
“Wrong.”
“Wrong?”
“Wrong. You were not tapping your
fingers. You were distracting everyone in this room. Sit down and
be silent for the rest of the period.”
“Err...okay.” I spun on my heel
and went back to my seat, confused. I kept my eyes down for a good
while, then looked back up curiously.
We'd had this substitute for months
now. Mr. Lee – both my history and homeroom teacher – had gone
home one day after school and hadn't come back. Family issues, we
were told. He hadn't been the best teacher, but we all still missed
him, especially when we had been told that Mrs. Castro would be our
teacher until he returned.
No one knew much about her, except that
she hated children, which was obvious from her actions. She offered
us no other information than that. She was a new substitute in our
school as well – or, at least, we thought so, because no one
remembered ever seeing her before. Some kids had even overheard the
teachers saying that they didn't know who she was. But the principal
acted as though she was an old friend and told all the students that
we simply didn't remember her.
That was highly doubtful. I narrowed
my eyes and tried to make some deductions.
She didn't sleep well last night.
Her graying hair was a little greasy and drawn back into a bun, like
she hadn't had time to shower in the morning due to sleeping in, and
there were more lines than usual under her eyes. Working?
No, Mrs. Castro didn't care about her students. Stress?
Maybe, but...
Fear?
Was she scared about something? More
importantly, where had that thought come from? I shook my
head and looked down at the printed-out blogposts I had been drawing
on. Perhaps I was just reading too much of the Blog of Dr. John H.
Watson. Trying to deduce things like Sherlock, and all that. I
tried to focus on my reading again, but I kept glancing over at Mrs.
Castro.
Now that I thought about it, she did
look a little antsy. Her eyes kept straying from her computer over
to the clock, then to the door, like she was expecting someone. She
kept tugging on the sleeve of her out of season Christmas sweater.
Suddenly she sat straight up and looked
around the room. I ducked my head and began reading the blogposts
furiously. Close call.
My neck prickled as
her eyes stopped on me. My hands started to sweat, which they did
under almost any slightly stressful circumstance. It was a little
gross.
Basically, I needed to stop pretending
I was a detective and not stare creepily at people. It wasn't the
first time I'd done it.
Tick.
Tock.
Tick.
Tock.
No one was talking. We used to, when
Mr. Lee was our teacher. But there was zero tolerance for any kind
of noise in Mrs. Castro's classroom. The clock was the loudest thing
in the room. Eyes kept straying to it as people began quietly,
discreetly shoving their things into their bags, ready to make their
escapes.
Any second now...
The bell rang, and everyone scrambled
for the door.
“Order!” Mrs. Castro shouted.
“Everyone, get back inside and walk out in a line like civilized
human beings!”
Too late. While
some people dutifully trudged back to the classroom, most of my
classmates and I were already halfway down the hall. Another escape
well done. I nodded my approval. A couple of freshmen hurried out
of my way, presumably because it looked like I had nodded at nothing
and was crazy.
I smiled and winked
at them, then slipped inside my science class.
Mr. Gilmore was
drawing stick figures on the whiteboard, humming sixties rock tunes
to himself, per usual. It seemed that today was a day that the
citizens of Stick Figure Land went to war with each other on a
chessboard, holding fruit as weapons. I stifled a giggle.
We simply could not
have a better science teacher.
“Good afternoon,
Miss Bonny!” Mr. Gilmore called.
“Hello, sir,” I
responded, then dropped into my seat by the window and watched as he
gave all the stick figures party hats.
Connor flew into
his seat just as the second bell rang, looking winded and rather
confused. I opened my mouth, but he held up a hand to stop me.
“Need...”
Gasp. “...Air...” Gasp. “...Not...” Gasp. “Questions.”
I cupped my hand
and held it out to him. “Here. Have some air.”
He punched me in
the side, lightly, and I laughed. Mr. Gilmore was still drawing,
apparently not aware that class was supposed to start now. I waited
for my companion to regain his breath.
“We were in the
media center for study hall and the librarian held us back because
some people were talking,” Connor said eventually, running a hand
through his hair. “I had to sprint to get here on time.”
“You needn't
have,” I said, amused, gesturing at our teacher.
“Well,
I see that now. But
–”
“Okay, class!”
Mr. Gilmore clapped his hands and grinned cheerily. “We will be
continuing the forensics unit we started at the beginning of the
year. Today, we're learning which part of the body bleeds the most!”
Thirty minutes
later, my hands were still tinted pink with pig blood. I picked at
the blood under my fingernails unconsciously. Connor looked
traumatized.
“That was awful,”
he muttered, rubbing his arms in an attempt to comfort himself.
I looked at him out
of the corner of my eye. “Pansy.”
“Shut up.”
I smiled and patted
his arm comfortingly. We were sitting back in Mrs. Castro's room,
ready for history, our last class of the day. We only dared to talk
because the teacher was temporarily out of the room.
The students
nearest the door suddenly flipped open their notebooks and looked
down at the table. There was flurry of movement as everyone
scrambled for their things. Connor's elbow caught me in the face
while he reached for his textbook, and I kicked him back under the
table.
As predicted, Mrs.
Castro huffed and puffed her way into the classroom in her usual
cloud of anger. “Quiet!” she shouted, even though by this point,
everyone was already silent. I suspected that she just liked
shouting.
She walked up to
the front of the room and tapped the chalkboard impatiently. “Read
pages four forty through four forty-nine in your textbook, and answer
the questions at the end in your notebooks.” I frowned. She
looked tired and, yes, anxious. She wasn't even shouting anymore,
instead opting to sigh and shake her head. “I will check them
tomorrow at the end of class, but they won't be graded.” Then she
walked straight back out of the room.
Connor looked over
at me, and I stared back at him, just as bewildered. That was not
how history class normally started. Normally, we were treated to
more yelling. And normally, we had lectures the whole period and
were expected to take notes. We never did work from the book, and
nothing was left ungraded.
Murmurs started up
around the room as people discussed this strange phenomena and asked
each other questions about the work. No one talked loudly, though.
Everyone knew better than that. Mrs. Castro had a habit of popping
back in the room randomly whenever she left, trying to catch us not
working.
I paged through my
book absently, my mind wandering. I was slightly aware of Connor
talking to me, but I waved him off. Something was obviously off, and
I wanted to find out what. The question was, did I dare?
I snapped back into
focus when something hit me hard in the head. “Ow! What? Huh?
Ow!”
Connor looked at me
levelly, still holding his history textbook aloft, prepared to smack
me again if needed.
“NASA to
Katherine. NASA to Katherine. Do you copy? I repeat, do you copy?”
I scowled at him.
“What?”
“You were really
spacing out there.” He tilted his head slowly as he spoke, as if
changing the angle of his view would help him to understand my
thoughts better. “You doing alright?”
I was tempted to
lie to him, but even if Connor wasn't an exceptionally perceptive
person, he knew me well enough to call me out on things like that. I
knew I would tell him the truth. But that didn't stop me from pursing
my lips in pretend contemplation and looking him over.
His forehead was
furrowed. Concern? Irritation? His lips were pressed
slightly, as sign I knew well. Definitely irritation. But
his foot was bouncing slightly. Connor was not a twitchy person.
That meant anxiety. And anxiety means concern. Concern, and
irritation.
Concerned about my
answer. Irritated that I hadn't given it yet.
“I think
something may be wrong with Mrs. Castro,” I said softly, watching
carefully for Connor's reaction. His eyebrows drew a little closer
together, but I didn't take the time to read what that meant, because
he nodded for me to continue.
“She seemed
really...overwrought, I suppose, in study hall, and kept looking at
the door as though she was expecting someone, but was nervous about
it. I think it was like those times when you both really want
something to happen, so you can get it over with, but at the same
time just want it to never happen. It was like she was scared of
something.”
Connor kept his
eyes on mine the whole time. His face was blank, and it was kind of
intense, so I started to panic and blubber, my composure slipping.
“I don't know if that makes sense, coming from me, or if it just
makes me sound crazy. But, yeah, I mean...yeah,” I finished
lamely.
For a while, he
said nothing, but he did stop staring at me. I took the opportunity
to jump on my work. I had just finished the reading when Connor
finally spoke.
“You deduced
those things?” He looked down at his work, not at me, even though
I had turned to him.
I nodded, wondering
where he was going with that question, because, let's face it, it was
kind of obvious that I had.
“Were you reading
the blog again earlier?”
That question threw
me off completely, and I let it show through my facial expression.
Part of me wanted to punch him for the exasperated way he had said
it. The other part was wondering what John Watson's blog had to do
with our history teacher.
“Yeah, so?”
Connor sighed and
finally looked at me. Relieved? “Well, that clears
everything up.”
“Wait, what? No,
it doesn't.”
“It kind of does,
actually.”
I lifted my hands
in the universal signal of confusion. “What are you talking
about?”
“K, you've been
on a crime story kick all year. And the blog – which, don't get me
wrong, is intensely cool – has started you on a deductions kick.
Which is also very cool, but sometimes you read too far into things.
It happens to the best of us, and it's probably what happened today.”
He smiled hesitantly, like he was afraid I was going to hit him.
I still wanted to,
a bit, but he was making sense again. That was the thing with
Connor; nearly everything he says makes sense, which makes it very
hard to argue with him. Hadn't I been telling myself that I was over
thinking everything earlier? Connor was probably right.
But...
“I still think
something is going on,” I told him. He shrugged and smiled wider.
“I didn't expect
you not to. Just wanted to give you another possibility to think
about.” I rolled my eyes.
“There are better
ways to do that.”
“Mm. Whatever
you say.”
We went back to
working, our conversation concluded. I breezed through the work
without really absorbing what I was reading or writing, my mind still
preoccupied. Connor didn't really believe me. A blow to my
confidence, yes, but not an especially large one. He always erred on
the side of doubt, making it near impossible to get him to believe
anything without hard evidence. It was annoying a lot of the time,
but as much as I hated to admit it, it could be refreshing.
“Look alive, K.”
Connor nudged me with his elbow, keeping his head down. “Mrs.
Castro's back.”
I glanced up
quickly, then curled closer around my work, a defense move I tended
to take whenever a teacher was in a hostile mood. It didn't actually
help, but it did make me feel a little safer. Connor tried to cover
his Doctor Who hair. He failed miserably.
Mrs. Castro looked
even more disgruntled than usual. She looked around the room,
presumably for someone to yell at. Then she just sat down at her
desk and looked at her hands. Her shoulders sagged. She was
deflated. Something, obviously, had gone wrong.
Connor glanced at
me out of the corner of his eye, then reached over and scribbled
something on my notebook:
'Alright, you could be right.
Something might be going on. But I still don't totally believe you.'
I smirked and wrote
back:
'You will.'
There were three
minutes left in the period when the man walked in.
Connor was the
first to notice. I would have felt embarrassed for not being more
observant if he didn't always watch the door during the end of class.
'Look up. Don't
do anything stupid,' was what he wrote to me.
I, along with
everyone else in the room, gawked at the newcomer. He was dressed
sharper than anyone else you would see in our school, save the
principal. A suit and tie, no less. What was it with adult men and
suits in late spring anyway? Were they just heat resistant or
something?
He glared around
the room before stalking up to Mrs. Castro, bending down to whisper
in her ear. I watched her face carefully, but it betrayed nothing.
Very unlike earlier.
Interesting.
I wanted to
completely prove Connor wrong. I wanted some adventure. But that
involved taking risks.
The bell was going
to ring in about thirty seconds. I made my decision. What I was
about to do would get me in a boatload of trouble if I got caught.
It was a terrifying plan of action, one that I had no real reason to
follow through on. But it seemed that my inner detective was
impossible to suppress, because I was about to blatantly ignore
Connor's note.
The last bell rung,
and during the commotion, I grabbed my things and threw my pencil
halfway across the room, behind the computer cart. As I started
after it, Connor stared at me.
“Whoops,” I
told him. “It fell.”
I dove behind the
cart before he could say anything else and blow my cover. Having no
other choice, he filed out of the room with our classmates. I knew
he would be furious, especially if I didn't find out anything. I was
sorry for not giving him more of a warning, but that wasn't enough to
stop me.
Then it was just
me, Mrs. Castro, and the newcomer.
I tried to breathe
as quietly as possible.
“What is it that
you want, Mr. Roland?” I heard Mrs. Castro ask. I couldn't see
what was happening – the cart had wedged me into a corner. Great
for not being seen, but not for seeing.
Mr. Roland answered
the question with a question. “Are you aware that there is a
police officer here almost every day?”
“Yes, of course,
but I don't see what –”
“You did not
inform us of this.”
There was a pause.
“He's a
blundering fool, that policeman. He poses no threat.” Mrs. Castro
sounded like a person who was trying to convince herself of that
fact.
“Did it ever
occur to you that perhaps he is trained to come off as so,
considering that he works in a school? Did we not specifically tell
you to inform us about anything that could compromise us? It has
been five months, Melinda. When did you plan on telling us?”
Mr. Roland began to
pace. His footsteps were louder, sharper than Mrs. Castro's. His
pacing took him very close to where I was crouched. My heart, which
was already beating very fast, became an Olympic sprinter and won the
bronze medal. We were all so proud.
“I...” Mrs.
Castro very clearly did not know what to say. “I, um, well, I...”
“Oh, never mind.”
Mr. Roland snapped. “It doesn't matter anymore. It will happen
today.”
There was a sharp
gasp. “But isn't that being too hasty? Are we ready for this?”
“Do not question
me.” He stopped pacing next to the computer cart and began
drumming his fingers on the top. I could see the back of his head.
Forget the bronze
medal. My heart was taking home the gold. My mind raced, but there
was no suitable excuse. Tears started pricking at my eyes, and I
stuffed my fist into my mouth. If I started sniffling, it would be
over without a doubt.
“We are already
set,” Mr. Roland said. “Be ready.” I expected him to turn
around and see me crouched there. But then he moved away, and my
tears turned from tears of fear to ones of relief. I listened
closely to his footsteps. He was headed towards the door.
There was the
creaking of a chair, and Mrs. Castro's distinctive footfalls started
after him. When I heard the door swing shut, I counted to five.
Then I peaked over the cart. The room was empty. I scrambled out
from my hiding spot and hurried to the door. Sticking my head into
the hallway, I saw that it was also devoid of people. There weren't
any lockers here. I counted to five again. Then I made a mad dash
out of the room and around the corner.
The next hall was
full of students, but I was so relieved to be alive that I danced all
the way down it anyway. People edged out of my way. Some of the
cliquey people laughed at me. But I didn't care. I boogied all the
way to my locker, where Connor was waiting, his irritated expression
quickly changing to a bemused one.
“Uh,” he said.
I threw my arms
around him in a bear hug. “I'm alive!”
“Did you hear
anything?” he asked as he hugged me back, a little awkwardly.
I pulled back and
stared at him. “Connor, darling, I heard everything.”
We meandered out of
the building. It took the students ages to leave anyway, so my
little escapade had not put us in danger of getting yelled at. I'd
finished recounting my story a couple minutes ago. Connor has been
silent since then. Thinking.
He stopped walking.
Turned to me. Opened his mouth. The closed it and shook his head.
The meaning behind this was clear.
'There are no words to describe how
incredibly stupid and awe-inspiring I find you at the same time.'
I nodded. “I
know, kid. Me too.”
Connor sighed and
looked at me tiredly. “What does it mean?”
“No idea.”
“But you're going
to find out, aren't you?”
“I'm going to
try.”
“Katherine...”
His voice was full of warning, and I held up my hands in defense.
“I won't do
anything stupid, I swear!”
Connor scowled.
“The two of us define 'stupid' very differently, Katherine.”
I sighed. “Connor,
look, it sounded pretty serious and, honestly, kind of shady. I
can't just not do anything.”
“Then do
something by telling someone! You're only seventeen.”
“And who, might I
ask, is going to listen to a seventeen year-old?” I snapped,
planting my hands on my hips.
His scowled
deepened. “You're reliable, though, so I'm pretty sure that a lot
of people will at least hear you out. Besides, you could be
overreacting. Ever considered that? I mean, it wouldn't be the
first time! Remember the haunted house last Halloween?”
That hit home. My
mouth fell open. Connor's eye widened, as if he'd just realized what
he'd said. He knew I was touchy about that. I did not like to be
reminded that I had given myself a concussion because a fake spider
freaked me out too much. I closed the distance between us and glared
up at him, my hands shaking. “You complete–”
Connor never got to
find out what I was going to call him. My tongue lashing was cut
short by a loud call of, “Oh, hello you two!”
We jumped apart and
spun to face Officer Reginald, known as Reg to the students, and
another man we didn't know. Reg was friendly enough, always greeting
me in the halls, but he didn't tolerate fights. His eyes were
narrowed slightly, like he knew that I had been about to sock Connor
in the mouth.
“Not fighting
here, are we?” Reg joked, but his eyes were still serious. The
unnamed man looked between us. Because to my experiences earlier
with Mr. Roland, I was wary of him.
Connor panicked.
“No, sir! We...we were just...having a lively debate
about...um...”
I can't honestly
say I felt sorry for him, but I jumped to his rescue anyway. Old
habits die hard.
“About the
legality of pomegranates in Romania.” I nodded wisely, even though
I didn't know where this crap was coming from. “It's a very
serious issue. Five ducks have been admitted to mental hospitals
because of how the riots are affecting the, um, frog population.”
All three of the
Y-chromosomes stared at me.
“It's a very
serious issue,” I repeated.
“...Alright.”
Reg seemed to accept my explanation. “Well, I don't want to hold
you two up, but I just thought I would introduce you to my old
friend, Detective Inspector Lestrade.” He gestured to his
companion.
“How you do?”
Connor asked pleasantly, holding out his hand. Lestrade shook it.
“Fine, thank
you.” He sounded English.
“Hi,” I said
eloquently. Lestrade nodded at me, still obviously questioning my
sanity.
There was a moment
of awkward silence. Then we all started walking towards the front
door again, me leading the way, because really, what else do you do
in the presence of a person you're mad at and two policemen? Other
students were still streaming past us, but no one bothered us.
I wasn't sure why
the policemen were still with us. I guess Reg didn't really believe
my story about pomegranates in Romania. Lestrade was just following
Reg.
I took another
breath, as was dictated by my natural instincts, and started gagging
uncontrollably. Everyone stopped behind me, but no one else seemed
to be dying. I clamped my hands over my nose. The smell was spicy
and sweet and way too overpowering.
“Is
that...cinnamon?” Connor muttered. It did, in fact, smell like
cinnamon. Way too much cinnamon.
Help me, my
inner actress cried. I am drowning in a scent sea of cinnamon.
Where art thou, Febreze?
It was a good thing
that I stuck to stage crew.
“Where could that
be coming from?” Reg wondered.
A hand was placed
on my shoulder, and I jumped, glaring up at Connor. “Katherine, do
you know?” he asked. “It looks like it's stronger for you.”
“I see right
though your passive-aggressive taunts, mister,” I hissed at him.
At least, I thought he was taunting me. He looked sad when I said
that, though. Sad and really sorry. I felt bad, but I couldn't very
well make a heartfelt apology right then. Besides, I was still
smarting over what he said earlier.
Instead, I sniffed
the air through my hands while turning in a slow circle. I stopped
facing a supply closet and frowned.
“I think it's
coming from there.” My voice sounded higher than usual and
muffled. “Which is extremely odd. Someone open it.”
The adult males
exchanged a look, then Reg shrugged. “Why not? It seems
interesting enough.” He walked over and yanked open the door.
Reg jumped back.
Students stopped walking. I shrieked in surprise, and, forgetting
that I was mad at him, grabbed Connor at the same time he grabbed me.
Someone else screamed.
Someone had fallen
out of the supply closet.
Mr. Lee.
Dead.
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Whoops. It's only part one and I've already damaged a friendship, sort of revealed the reason for the title, and killed someone :O
Okay, notes!
1) Pushing Up Daisies, my SP fanfiction, IS STILL A THING THAT IS HAPPENING! I promise. I've just not had a lot of inspiration lately. But I will get the next part done soon.
2) Because school ends on Thursday (WOO HOO!), I'm going to try to upload a piece of writing, hmm...every two weeks or so. Don't kill me if I don't! It's just something I will try to do. I can't promise that it will be a story, or that it will be long, but I will try.
3) I'm going to read a lot of books this summer. Just though you might like to know.
Stay awesome, bloggers
-Thalia
Thank you so much, Kal!
ReplyDelete*hugs*
Brilliant :D I loved it. I've tried multiple times to write something from the perspective of a student, something most here can relate to. And then, something happens and the student is pushed into a situation that he/she wouldn't normally be able to conquer. Mine never got past page 1 xD But you seem to have completed a piece perfectly, and I look forward to many more parts :)
ReplyDelete...I loved the 'It was a good thing I stuck to stage crew' part :P
Aaaaaaaaaaa thank you Hellboy!
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I was originally reluctant to read this as I haven't seen Sherlock and since you mentioned it was a Sherlok fan fic I was worried there might have been spoilers.
ReplyDeleteBut I've read it now and Holy Furgh it was awesome! *bows down to the Great God Furgh* This piece of writing has such great talent and style. I don't know why you were worried writing in first person because you did it brilliantly!
Also cliffhanger ARRRGH! You are a super excellent epica writer my dear!
fdgnsdfkjbkJBLKJSFDBGKLSJFBG THANK YOU!!! :'''''D
ReplyDeleteHeh. Just re-read this.
ReplyDeleteSo now I've actually seen Sherlock I know who Lestrade is.
Also is there going to be a part two?
I look forward to one immensely.
mmmmmmaaaayyyybbbeee????
DeleteI hope so anyway
From the vague ideas I've been having, I don't think it will include many actual Sherlock canon characters if I do continue it? Instead it will be K and C solving crimes together while consulting John's blog, for, like, tips or something.
I dunno?